I respectfully ask for your criticisms, I will do my best to fix any issues you may have.

CITY 39 - MELBOURNE, AUSTRALIA Melbourne, before the Black Mesa Incident was nicknamed the 'Garden City' for the plethora of exotic flowers and plants it housed. However, after the Xenian Menace got it's grubby little hands on the city it was left in ruins. Other worldly monsters terrorized the...

LOOK AT MY LAWYER DAWG IM GOING TO JAIL!

All I'm saying is it's wacky af

My nigga, That straight up sounds like a fucking comedy skit. Three gay soldiers go into a shower and have sex and it's all overheard by a nearby funeral procession.

Excuse me... WHAT!

Personally, I think Conscripts could exist. But not under the name 'Conscripts' more like some kinda auxiliary unit in the Combine's military machine. Of course, it wouldn't be how the beta depicts them, they would be incredibly brainwashed and have near Overwatch level loyalty to the Combine...

Here take this med kit!

Cumming in rubber glove.

Alright. So, I fixed the majority of the issues. I did my best to make the first paragraph easier to read.

I'll get to fixing it right away.

This is cool. I like the artwork.

i am being groomed by brad chel

be a man n' fight me yourself cunt

Chips Dubbo, is a soldier in this detachment. His rank is unknown at this time.

I understand there are some errors with formatting. I tried for around thirty-minutes to straighten it out and it just didn't work, while I was writing it looked fine, but the preview and the final show otherwise.

PRIMARY CONSCRIPTION ARM OF OCEANIA ALPHA DETACHMENT "BUSHRANGERS" CITY 39 Alpha Detachment, lovingly named by those who serve in it as the “Bushrangers”, is the primary human military force in the Australian Outback. Maintained and supplied by the Overwatch Central Intelligence Network...

*monkey noise*

need i say anything else?

Hm yes, me play funny hl2rp