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Alpha Detachment "Bushrangers"

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PRIMARY CONSCRIPTION ARM OF OCEANIA
ALPHA DETACHMENT "BUSHRANGERS"
CITY 39


Alpha Detachment, lovingly named by those who serve in it as the “Bushrangers”, is the primary human military force in the Australian Outback. Maintained and supplied by the Overwatch Central Intelligence Network, members of the Bushrangers are some best equipped. Because of the hostile nature of environments they operate within, besides the standardized equipment they are also given the privilege of carrying anti-venom and anti-heat products to keep the detachment at peak operating efficiency.

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Alpha Detachment was commissioned by the Civil Authority of City Thirty-Nine after an alarming increase of insurgent activity in certain areas of the Outback. The Bushrangers have several different facilities across the continent, the main training center is located in Tasmania named 'Camp Curtain', a forward operating base in what was formerly Alice Springs named 'Fort Irwin', an airbase in the former RAAF base Williamtown,and a small albeit hardy garrison in URPD Compound 3 that patrols the surrounding perimeter. Troops are rotated between all of three of the facilities via air and ground transport consisting of Land Rover 110 and CH-47 'Chinook' Helicopters.aplhavehicles5final.jpg
The command staff of the Bushrangers consists of the former Australian Defense Force officers, that were conscripted and forcefully made to undergo memory replacement to ensure their loyalties to the Union. The majority of the staff is housed at the Conscription Arm's Center for Operations on the continent. That being located, inside City 39. The tactics used by the Bushrangers are unique in the fact that prefer to take prisoners and put a very high value on the lives of their soldiers.
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I understand there are some errors with formatting. I tried for around thirty-minutes to straighten it out and it just didn't work, while I was writing it looked fine, but the preview and the final show otherwise.
 
Chips Dubbo, is a soldier in this detachment. His rank is unknown at this time.
 
Hi, I have identified your formatting errors and there were returns in areas that looked like spaces. There were also size differences in text in the document- those are fixed.

Now the current problem this faces right now is on the grammatical end. To point this out, the first paragraph is one big sentence. I would advise to to watch where you place your end periods along with commas. The second paragraph is the same, but it's divided into two sentences instead of the one. The third paragraph is a big improvement and is what you should strive for.

As for your document, it is concise with the information presented and gives a positive vibe what an Australian conscription force would have been. Feel free to make the changes above as per the formatting end and I will accept this and your lads will be placed in Australia for all to see.
 
Hi, I have identified your formatting errors and there were returns in areas that looked like spaces. There were also size differences in text in the document- those are fixed.

Now the current problem this faces right now is on the grammatical end. To point this out, the first paragraph is one big sentence. I would advise to to watch where you place your end periods along with commas. The second paragraph is the same, but it's divided into two sentences instead of the one. The third paragraph is a big improvement and is what you should strive for.

As for your document, it is concise with the information presented and gives a positive vibe what an Australian conscription force would have been. Feel free to make the changes above as per the formatting end and I will accept this and your lads will be placed in Australia for all to see.

I'll get to fixing it right away.
 
Hi, I have identified your formatting errors and there were returns in areas that looked like spaces. There were also size differences in text in the document- those are fixed.

Now the current problem this faces right now is on the grammatical end. To point this out, the first paragraph is one big sentence. I would advise to to watch where you place your end periods along with commas. The second paragraph is the same, but it's divided into two sentences instead of the one. The third paragraph is a big improvement and is what you should strive for.

As for your document, it is concise with the information presented and gives a positive vibe what an Australian conscription force would have been. Feel free to make the changes above as per the formatting end and I will accept this and your lads will be placed in Australia for all to see.

Alright. So, I fixed the majority of the issues. I did my best to make the first paragraph easier to read.
 
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