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(Short Half-lfie Story Paragraph) Conscience inside the void

Eclipse

Eclipse

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I remembered.. an moment in a period of time. That i seen in the dark. Floating in the distance that looked like an levitating figure that skin was shining purple. I tried to spoke out to it.. echoing in the void, and that same thing thought of the same. Talking who i was
Then again. I seen traces of echoing lines above the empty air almost like data of communication.
And i was memorised by it.. But the figure was closer, i can properly see his cyan eye staring at me with such interest. And without even thinking he wanted to know about the spirit who freed them and any or relatements to the resistence inside this plate of conscience.

The vision started to shine in brightness before fading away...
 
Eclipse said:
I remembered.. an moment in a period of time. That i seen in the dark. Floating in the distance that looked like an levitating figure that skin was shining purple. I tried to spoke out to it.. echoing in the void, and that same thing thought of the same. Talking who i was
Then again. I seen traces of echoing lines above the empty air almost like data of communication.
And i was memorised by it.. But the figure was closer, i can properly see his cyan eye staring at me with such interest. And without even thinking he wanted to know about the spirit who freed them and any or relatements to the resistence inside this plate of conscience.

The vision started to shine in brightness before fading away...
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Despite the clear spelling errors, the concept of the writing itself is interesting! Keep practicing and you'll definitely see improvements. Don't get discouraged by non-constructive criticism.
 
ClapTrap said:
Despite the clear spelling errors, the concept of the writing itself is interesting! Keep practicing and you'll definitely see improvements. Don't get discouraged by non-constructive criticism.
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I tried my hardest to go in-depth with it. I was trying to think of a way i could form an interesting story yet making it intriguing (i guess), so i kinda just mishmash a couple of lines together. I didn't exactly have an huge premise behind the whole story but i was originally making it as an sort of copy-cat of the few copypastas that people were posting on the "City-24 v4" comment section, and i didn't wanted to scrap my writing. So i decided to post it here.
 
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